中外学生大不同

　    　想看下中外学生写作的区别吗？可以围观下。看懂了这些区别，想必同学们写作文会更加地道。雅思学校为大家整理如下：

        Bicycles have become more and more popular in China. People ride bikes to their work places, to

　　shopping areas, to schools, and so on. During the rush hours, you can often see a boiling sea of

　　bicycles running in all directions. With the largest number of bike riders in the world, China

　　is often referred to as the kingdom of bicycles.　(主题句不明显，不知道作者想要说什么：自行车越

　　来越流行，要讨论流行趋势?自行车那么多，要讨论自行车对城市的影响?中国是自行车王国，要讨论中国的自

　　行车历史? )

　　    Compared with cars, bikes have many advantages(这应该是主题句，在这么短的文章里应该放在段).

　　First, they are not very expensive, and almost every family can afford them. (这句话分成2个句子

　　比较好，一句是key point,一句做进一步解释)Second, they are very handy and convenient though they

　　are not so fast as cars. With a bike, you can go anywhere you like, and you don't have to look

　　for a large parking place. By riding bikes, you can avoid traffic jams and thus save the time

　　and the money for taking taxis(同点一样，但这一点思路有些乱). Third, they do not cause air

　　or sound pollution(没有解释，这一点肯定拿不到好分数).

　　    Riding bikes does good to your health if you ride it regularly(这应该是文章要论述的第四点，但没

　　有连接词，又分了段，打乱了文章的整体结构). In modern times, people are usually too busy to spare

　　any time for physical exercise. Riding a bike to your work place regularly serves as a good way

　　to keep yourself strong and healthy. (2个句子的顺序换一下比较好。因为前面已经说了有益于健康，读

　　者等着听解释，但作者却换了话题。句话应该是第二句话的原因。)

　　     Therefore, a bicycle is really an important means of transportation in China. It has been very

　　useful, convenient and necessary ever since it was invented. And I do believe it will still be

　　so in the future.(结论态度不鲜明，没有紧扣主题句。 应该重述四个优点，然后给出结论)

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